Synopsis – it’s like doing pilates in a Smartcar

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Explaining a novel in a matter of sentences is something I’ve never tried before.  I think the only experience I can compare it to is trying to pee in a wedding dress.  Awkward, frustrating and just not natural.

Brevity has never been a talent of mine.  When I went to “announce” my novel on the NaNoWriMo site, and it expected me to put down a synopsis, I was taken off guard.  Nearly offended.  I signed up because I like making big wordy things, and now they ask for a small wordy thing, and people who write big wordy things shouldn’t also be expected to make small wordy things.  That’s just improper.

Anyway, I suffered through the indignity of it all and created a synopsis.  Any feedback about which part, if any, pulls your attention would be highly welcome!  I’d also be happy to return the favor.  As I make changes, I’ll track them below in case the edit process is helpful to anyone else.

Oh, and there’s a cover now and everything!  Gasp!

Shipmeet

Synopsis:

Maika’s not exactly equipped for continental life.  Still, when her ship colony stops at port in one of the largest remaining landmasses in the world, she can’t resist getting off to explore the first city she’s seen in years.

Pirthe is a proud kingdom, as old as the rainstones that protect it.  Alive with culture and music, it is controlled by those skilled enough to dominate the fiercely beautiful living weapons known as the Jin.  Maika just has one problem.  She’s kinda, sorta accidentally stolen one.

Stranded and on the run in an unfamiliar world, she’s now stuck with a brooding superweapon for company and a variety of monarchs, rogues, and philosophers out to control her connection with the Jin.  Choosing a side proves to be her one chance to reunite with her people.  But will the world, and her humanity, survive the process?  Choosing a side may be her one chance to reunite with her people, but what… and who… is she willing to sacrifice?

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2 thoughts on “Synopsis – it’s like doing pilates in a Smartcar

  1. As far as blurbs go (that seems more like a blurb to me than a synopsis, but I think we’re on the same page conceptually), it’s pretty darn good. It presents the main character, establishes the specific setting and the type of universe, and presents the main conflict. It’s better than most blurbs I’ve read, in fact, including any I’ve ever come up with.

    The only thing I didn’t like too much were the two closing sentences. One, they seem a bit generic (in execution, not concept), and two, the term “process” is too bland for something as high stakes as total destruction.

    How about something like “Choosing a side may be her one chance to reunite with her people, but what… and who… is she willing to sacrifice?”

    That might not reflect the actual story, but something like it that suggests not just plot conflict but moral conflict can be intriguing to readers.

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    • Oh wow, great idea for the last sentence! I wasn’t too happy with the end either, and that is actually the perfect way of phrasing it. There is absolutely a who involved. Thank you for the great feedback!

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